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the names of all the men twenty years old or older, able to go to war, were counted

This can be stated in active form. See how you translated this in Numbers 1:20. Alternate translation: "they counted by name all the men twenty years old or older, able to go to war, by" (See: rc://en/ta/man/jit/figs-activepassive)

older, able to go to war, were

"older—men who were able to go to war—were." See how you translated this in Numbers 1:20.