From bda8a8a157bbf8e2320860e02430dbf28b88d806 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Tom Warren Date: Wed, 24 Aug 2016 10:34:50 -0400 Subject: [PATCH] 1st person continuity --- 25-LAM/01.usfm | 144 +++++++++++++++++++++++++------------------------ 25-LAM/02.usfm | 3 +- 25-LAM/03.usfm | 6 +-- 3 files changed, 77 insertions(+), 76 deletions(-) diff --git a/25-LAM/01.usfm b/25-LAM/01.usfm index 0bee97ba..5ed4c424 100644 --- a/25-LAM/01.usfm +++ b/25-LAM/01.usfm @@ -22,12 +22,14 @@ \s5 \q1 -\v 3 All of us, the people of Judah have become poor and have suffered greatly; -\q2 most of our people have gone to other lands as slaves. -\q1 They now live in other lands -\q2 and have no peace. -\q1 Our enemies captured us all; -\q2 there was no way for us to escape. +\v 3 The people of Judah have become poor +\q2 and have suffered greatly. +\q1 Almost all of our people +\q2 were forced to leave our land. +\q1 We now live in another country +\q2 and we have no peace. +\q1 When the people Judah were unable to defend ourselves, +\q2 that was when our enemies captured us. \b \s5 @@ -83,124 +85,124 @@ \q1 We did not imagine how we would suffer; \q2 there is no one to comfort us. \q1 We all call out to God, "Yahweh, look at how we are suffering -\q2 because our enemies have defeated us! +\q2 because our enemies have defeated us!" \b \s5 \q1 \v 10 Our enemies have taken away all our treasures, \q2 all the valuable things that we owned. -\q1 We have seen soldiers from other nations, men who do not worship you, Yahweh, enter our sacred temple, -\q2 where you had said no foreigner must go." +\q1 People who do not worship you, Yahweh, are going into our sacred temple, +\q2 where you had said no foreigner must go into the place where your people worship you. \b \s5 \q1 -\v 11 We groan in the city -\q2 while we search for food; -\q1 we have given our most valuable things -\q2 to get food to eat to gain some strength. -\q1 We say, "Yahweh, look at us; -\q2 see how our enemies despise us!" +\v 11 All the people in the city cry out with pain +\q2 while they search for food. +\q1 They have given their most valuable things +\q2 to get food to eat to restore their strength. +\q1 Yahweh, look at me, +\q2 no one values my life. \b \q1 \v 12 You people who pass by, -\q2 you do not seem to care at all about what has happened to us. +\q2 you do not seem to care at all about what has happened to me. \q1 Look around and see -\q2 that there are no other people who are suffering as we are. -\q1 Yahweh has caused us to suffer -\q2 because he was extremely angry with us. +\q2 that there are no other people who are suffering as I do. +\q1 Yahweh has caused me to suffer +\q2 because he was punished me on the day he was angry with us, his people. \s5 \q1 \v 13 It is as though he sent a fire from heaven -\q2 that burned in our bones; -\q1 it is as though he has placed a trap to entangle our feet, -\q2 and has prevented us from walking any further. -\q1 He has abandoned us; -\q2 we are weak and alone every day, all during the day. +\q2 that burned in my bones; +\q1 it is as though he has placed a trap to entangle my feet, +\q2 and has prevented me from walking turning back to our home. +\q1 He has abandoned me; +\q2 I am weak and alone every day, all during the day. \b \q1 -\v 14 He turned the sins that we have committed into a heavy load for us to carry; -\q2 it is as though he tied them around our necks. +\v 14 He turned the sins that I have committed into a heavy load for me to carry; +\q2 it is as though he tied them around my neck. \q1 Previously we were strong, -\q2 but he has caused us to become weak. -\q1 He has allowed our enemies to capture us, -\q2 and we were not able to do anything to resist them. +\q2 but he has caused me to become weak. +\q1 He has allowed my enemies to capture me, +\q2 and I was not able to do anything to resist them. \b \s5 \q1 -\v 15 The Lord looked at our mighty soldiers, -\q2 laughed at them, and threw them away. +\v 15 The Lord looked at my mighty soldiers, who kept me safe. \q1 He summoned a great army -\q2 to come and crush our strong young soldiers. -\q1 It is as though the Lord has trampled on us people of Judah +\q2 to come and crush me to defeat my strong young soldiers. +\q1 The Lord has trampled on the people of Judah \q2 as people trample on grapes in a pit to make juice. \b \s5 \q1 -\v 16 We weep because of all those things; -\q2 our eyes are filled with tears. -\q1 There is no one to comfort us; -\q2 those who could encourage us are far away. -\q1 Our enemies have conquered us, -\q2 so our children have nothing good to hope for. +\v 16 I weep because of all these things. +\q2 My eyes are filled with tears. +\q1 There is no one to comfort me. +\q2 The one who comforts me is far away from me. +\q1 My children have no hope +\q2 because the enemy has taken us all captive. \b \q1 -\v 17 We people of Jerusalem reach out our hands to get help, -\q2 but there is no one to comfort us. -\q1 Yahweh has decided concerning us descendants of Jacob -\q2 that the people in nearby nations will become our enemies; -\q1 so they consider that +\v 17 The people who lived in Zion (the city of Jerusalem) +\q2 have no one to give them comfort. +\q1 Yahweh has give the order that the people in nearby nations +\q2 will become the enemies of the descendants of our father Jacob (who are also called the Israelites). \q2 Jerusalem has become disgusting to them. \b \s5 \q1 -\v 18 But what Yahweh has done to us is fair, -\q2 because we have refused to obey what he told us to do. -\q1 You people everywhere, listen to us; -\q2 look and see that we are suffering greatly. -\q1 We had many sons and daughters, -\q2 but our enemies took them all and made them go to far off lands. +\v 18 But what Yahweh has done to me is fair, +\q2 for I had refused to obey what he told me to do. +\q1 You people everywhere, listen to me! +\q2 Look and see that that I am suffering greatly. +\q1 My young daughters and brave sons +\q2 have been taken away to far off lands. \b \q1 -\v 19 We pleaded with our allies, in whom we trusted, to help us, -\q2 but they all refused, like men refuse to help a prostitute they slept with. -\q1 Our priests and our leaders -\q2 have died from hunger in the city -\q1 while they were searching for food -\q2 to eat to remain alive. +\v 19 I pleaded with our allies, in whom we trusted, to help, +\q2 but they all refused, +\q2 they told lies and did not keep their promises. +\q1 My priests and my leaders +\q2 died with the walls of the city +\q1 while they searched for food to eat. \b \s5 \q1 -\v 20 Yahweh, see that we are suffering very much. -\q2 It is as though our inner organs are on fire. -\q1 We are sad in our inner beings -\q2 because we have rebelled against you. +\v 20 Yahweh, see that I am suffering very much! +\q2 Inside of my body I am in great distress. +\q1 I am sad in the center of my being, +\q2 because I have rebelled against you +\q2 and have caused you great sadness! \q1 Our enemies kill people in the streets with their swords; -\q2 at home it is like sheol, the world of the dead. +\q2 and that makes our homes the places where the dead are kept. \b \s5 \q1 -\v 21 People heard us while we groaned, -\q2 but no one came to comfort us. -\q1 All our enemies know what happened to us; -\q2 they were all happy to hear about it. +\v 21 Here my groaning! +\q2 but no one came to comfort me. +\q1 All our enemies know what happened to me; +\q2 they were all happy to hear +\q2 about what Yahweh has done to his people. \q1 Please do soon what you have promised, \q2 when our enemies will suffer like we have suffered! \b \q1 -\v 22 Yahweh, consent to look at all the evil deeds -\q2 that they have committed. -\q1 Punish them as you have punished us -\q2 for all the sins that we committed. -\q1 We say this to you because we suffer and groan very much, -\q2 and we faint in our inner beings. +\v 22 Yahweh, let those evils deeds come near to you +\q2 so you may see them all! +\q1 Punish them as you have punished me +\q2 for all my sins! +\q1 I suffer and groan very much, +\q2 and I faint within my inner self. diff --git a/25-LAM/02.usfm b/25-LAM/02.usfm index 19df0f46..bda51105 100644 --- a/25-LAM/02.usfm +++ b/25-LAM/02.usfm @@ -2,7 +2,6 @@ \s5 \c 2 - \p \q1 \v 1 The Lord was extremely angry with us; @@ -199,7 +198,7 @@ \q2 without pitying them at all. \b \q1 -\v 22 You summoned our enemies to attack us from every direction, +\v 22 You summoned my enemies to attack from every direction, \q2 as though you were calling them to come to a feast. \q1 At that time you showed that you were very angry, \q2 and no one escaped. diff --git a/25-LAM/03.usfm b/25-LAM/03.usfm index bf4a5609..88bcea4c 100644 --- a/25-LAM/03.usfm +++ b/25-LAM/03.usfm @@ -90,10 +90,10 @@ \q2 He never stops acting kindly toward us. \q1 \v 23 Every morning he acts mercifully toward us again. -\q2 He is the one whom we can always trust in. +\q2 He is the one in whom we can always trust. \q1 -\v 24 So I sincerely say to myself, "Yahweh gives me what I need; -\q2 I will confidently wait for him to do good things for me." +\v 24 So I sincerely say to myself, "Yahweh gives me what I need!" +\q2 Because I believe this, I will confidently wait for him to do good things for me. \b \s5