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-\v 7 Our leaders were previously beautiful to look at,
-\q2 whiter and brighter than snow or milk;
-\q1 their bodies were redder than red coral;
-\q2 they were very strong and healthy.
+\v 7 Our leaders were could be compare to snow or milk,
+\q2  so they were clean and spotless.
+\q1 Their physical bodies were healthy, 
+\q2 and their health and strength could compare 
+\q2 to brilliance and beauty of sapphires. 
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 \v 8 But now their faces are blacker than soot,
@@ -66,17 +67,17 @@
 \q2 so the people slowly starved until they died.
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-\v 10 Women who usually acted very kindly
+\v 10 Women who usually acted with love and compassion
 \q2 have killed and cooked their own children;
 \q1 they ate them when there was no other food,
-\q2 when Jerusalem was surrounded by enemy soldiers.
+\q2 when Jerusalem was being destroyed by attacking armies.
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-\v 11 Yahweh has shown that he was extremely angry;
-\q1 it is as though he started a fire in Jerusalem
-\q2 that burned everything to ashes.
+\v 11 Yahweh has shown to everyone how angry he was with his people!
+\q1 His anger spread like a fire in Zion (the city of Jerusalem)
+\q2 that burned the city down to its rock foundations.
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@@ -150,11 +151,11 @@
 \q2 You will become so drunk that you will strip off your own clothes.
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-\v 22 You people of Jerusalem,
-\q2 the time when Yahweh punishes you will end;
-\q1 he will not allow you to continue to live in exile.
-\q2 But you people of Edom, Yahweh will punish you;
-\q2 he will reveal the wicked things that you have done.
+\v 22 You people of Zion (whose home is in Jerusalem),
+\q2 the time when Yahweh punishes you for your sins will come to an end.
+\q1 He will bring an end to the time you must spend in exile.
+\q2 But you people who are from Edom, Yahweh will punish you for your sins
+\q2 and he will make known to everyone the wicked things you have done.